@MLClark You are suffering from technical difficulties. I had an available window so I slipped it in.
Apparently Menosky and Braga differed over the ending. Menosky had Janeway stay (asleep) with EMH while he read the poetry. Braga rewrote Menosky, had Janeway leave to go to a sickbed, then he picks up the poetry book.
I saw EMH letting her leave as a first sign that he was coming out of it, he was concerned about her well-being. Either ending works.